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(Originally posted on: 05-26-02 10:55:12 PM)
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yes,
us people are just poems
we're 90% metaphor
with a leanness of meaning
approaching hyper-distillation
and once upon a time
we were moonshine
rushing down the throat of a giraffe
yes, rushing down the long hallway
despite what the p.a. announcement says
yes, rushing down the long stairs
with the whiskey of eternity
fermented and distilled
to eighteen minutes
burning down our throats
down the hall
down the stairs
in a building so tall
that it will always be there
yes, it's part of a pair
there on the bow of noah's ark
the most prestigious couple
just kickin back parked
against a perfectly blue sky
on a morning beatific
in its indian summer breeze
on the day that america
fell to its knees
after strutting around for a century
without saying thank you
or please

and the shock was subsonic
and the smoke was deafening
between the setup and the punch line
cuz we were all on time for work that day
we all boarded that plane for to fly
and then while the fires were raging
we all climbed up on the windowsill
and then we all held hands
and jumped into the sky

and every borough looked up when it heard the first blast
and then every dumb action movie was summarily surpassed
and the exodus uptown by foot and motorcar
looked more like war than anything i've seen so far
so far
so far
so fierce and ingenious
a poetic specter so far gone
that every jackass newscaster was struck dumb and stumbling
over 'oh my god' and 'this is unbelievable' and on and on
and i'll tell you what, while we're at it
you can keep the pentagon
keep the propaganda
keep each and every tv
that's been trying to convince me
to participate
in some prep school punk's plan to perpetuate retribution
perpetuate retribution
even as the blue toxic smoke of our lesson in retribution
is still hanging in the air
and there's ash on our shoes
and there's ash in our hair
and there's a fine silt on every mantle
from hell's kitchen to brooklyn
and the streets are full of stories
sudden twists and near misses
and soon every open bar is crammed to the rafters
with tales of narrowly averted disasters
and the whiskey is flowin
like never before
as all over the country
folks just shake their heads
and pour...


cuz take away our playstations
and we are a third world nation
under the thumb of some blue blood royal son
who stole the oval office and that phony election
and I'll tell you what, while we're at it
let me state unequivocally
he is not president of me


cuz i am a poem heeding hyper-distillation
i've got no room for a lie so verbose
i'm looking out over my whole human family
and i'm raising my glass in a toast...

yes, the lessons are all around us and a change is waiting there
so it's time to pick through the rubble, clean the streets
and clear the air
get our government to pull its big dick out of the sand
of someone else's desert
put it back in its pants
and quit the hypocritical chants of
freedom forever...

-Ani DiFranco

NOTE: edited for content and length
This reply was last edited on 07-29-02 06:05:25 PM by pussinboots.
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Reply 1 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-26-02 11:00:28 PM)
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It's long.
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Reply 2 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-26-02 11:10:50 PM)
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Waal, the first stanza confused the hell out of me... and the rest was too Anti-America for my taste. Plus it accuses G.W.B. of stealing the election, which strikes me the same way as Republicans bitching about Clinton, that they're hopelessly partisan and need to know when to give up. Plus, it just wasn't fun to read.

So, I disliked it.


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Reply 3 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-27-02 12:23:59 AM)
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Anti-American? Shit.

A true American would have the balls to criticize American behavior and policy in hopes of retaining the integrity of our nation, not dance around issues fearful of speaking their mind.

I'm in America. I can say FUCK America.

Fuck America. Long live my country.

This is off-topic... back to the poem.

It was ok. Alot of references and jumping, reminded me of Ginsberg on speed, typing in an AOL chat-room.
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Reply 4 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-27-02 01:25:47 AM)
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your creativity is definitely not in question. it seems like it should be read by someone who's very angry, however, and that kind of turns me off to it. purely technically speaking, it's outstanding. message-wise, we probably don't have much to talk about.
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Reply 5 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-27-02 11:51:21 AM)
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i loved it. it was well done, creative, and expressed the same views on American policy as myself.
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Reply 6 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-27-02 03:36:58 PM)
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Its quite longi'm a serial-killer :)
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Reply 7 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-27-02 04:01:15 PM)
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The first part confused the living shit out of me. Other then that, it was very creative. But seems to be missing something that ties it all together.
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Reply 8 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-27-02 04:23:56 PM)
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I found it very angsty.

"PREZ BUSH IS NOT MY PREZIDENT LOLZ HE STOLE TEH ELECTION PREPS R FAGZ LOLOLLOLOLOLO~!!!!!!!!111!!!!!!!1!"

You could start a punk band and make thousands.
THS[/whisper] - Heartless Right Winger[/whisper]
I am the eggman.[/whisper]
[whisper]They are the eggman.

[whisper]I am the walrus.

[whisper]Compassionate Conservative. BWAHAHAHA! Just kidding.
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Reply 9 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-27-02 04:29:21 PM)
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The grammar also displays the intelligence of whoever wrote it.
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I am the eggman.[/whisper]
[whisper]They are the eggman.

[whisper]I am the walrus.

[whisper]Compassionate Conservative. BWAHAHAHA! Just kidding.


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Reply 10 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-27-02 04:56:00 PM)
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For those of you that didn't catch the last line...

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[size=5]-Ani DiFranco[/size]
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Reply 11 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-27-02 08:43:09 PM)
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Indeed.
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Reply 12 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-27-02 09:45:34 PM)
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Quoted from THS:
It's long.
Quoted from Ztolk:
Its quite longi'm a serial-killer :)
WOW! THANK YOU FOR YOUR BRILLIANT CONTRIBUTIONS TO THIS THREAD! THOSE REPLIES WERE ABSOLUTELY NECESSARY AND HAVE BETTERED MY LIFE!!!!
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Reply 13 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-27-02 10:41:14 PM)
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Don't sass me.
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Reply 14 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-29-02 11:00:23 AM)
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Wow. Thats one of my favorite poems I have read in awhile. Very original. Although I don't agree with all of the concepts in it, it is a great poem. The first stanza is definately my favorite part. The whole things sort of moves between free verse and rythmical rhyme, although i am not sure if this was by design or not. Great poem. Where did you find it?

are you confused yet?
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Reply 15 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-29-02 04:48:45 PM)
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Ummm, Ani DiFranco is a very talented singer/songwriter who also does poems. I went to her concert in November of last year, which was just a few weeks after the attack, and she recited this poem. It really hit hard and was widely talked about for some time. Both negatively and positively. I figured that I would post it and see what kind of reaction it would get here. So far it's the same, very mixed.
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Reply 16 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-29-02 05:13:43 PM)
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Who is Ani DiFranco?
Cold hearted orb that rules the night, Removes the colours from our sight. Red is grey and yellow white, But we decide which is right. And which is an illusion???
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Reply 17 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-29-02 07:19:56 PM)
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Refer to line one of my above statement.
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Reply 18 of 38 (Originally posted on: 05-30-02 03:04:30 PM)
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The rather embarrassing stupidity of some of the above posts aside...

I liked that poem a lot. Very reminiscent of Ginsberg and the rest of the beats (does Ani have a drug history?). The last few lines ("and quit the hypocritical chants of freedom forever..."LOL IM SUCH A FAG!! hit the nail on the head... very nice.
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Reply 19 of 38 (Originally posted on: 06-01-02 07:39:51 AM)
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its too long. I may read it when i can be bothered.
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Reply 20 of 38 (Originally posted on: 06-01-02 12:59:30 PM)
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its too long. I may read it when i can be bothered.



Thanks for letting us know. I'm sure this thread would have gone somewhere had you not told us to wait until you had time in your busy life.

This Ani Difranco person interests me. Post more, please.
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Reply 21 of 38 (Originally posted on: 06-01-02 01:41:42 PM)
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Yeah, like her e-mail. I like sending hate mail.
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Reply 22 of 38 (Originally posted on: 06-01-02 07:50:04 PM)
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Quoted from THS:
It's long.


Quote:
"PREZ BUSH IS NOT MY PREZIDENT LOLZ HE STOLE TEH ELECTION PREPS R FAGZ LOLOLLOLOLOLO~!!!!!!!!111!!!!!!!1!"

You could start a punk band and make thousands.


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Yeah, like her e-mail. I like sending hate mail.


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Reply 23 of 38 (Originally posted on: 06-01-02 07:56:37 PM)
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Quoted from emtilt:
Wow. Thats one of my favorite poems I have read in awhile. Very original. Although I don't agree with all of the concepts in it, it is a great poem. The first stanza is definately my favorite part. The whole things sort of moves between free verse and rythmical rhyme, although i am not sure if this was by design or not. Great poem. Where did you find it?


I agree very much with you
I wasn't me,
It's the dog,
Take the dog!
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Reply 24 of 38 (Originally posted on: 07-29-02 06:06:25 PM)
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I like the structure and rhythm of the poem as well as the content. Yay!
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